Production Package - Script Finalising

In the end we managed to get to draft 4 of the script before we were ready to submit. The piece ended up being 103 pages long.

The feedback we received after the second draft pushed us to change up many of the scenes, and help make the dialogue seem less forced. To do this, we got our housemates to help with a read through of the entire script, in order to tell us which lines didn't work, and which did. This took place after the third draft was completed and we sent the edits over for feedback. The improvements were noted, however, as I said, the dialogue still came out slightly too forced over some of the script. We believe we have made significantly better changes to the dialogue, so it is less 'lets tell the audience the plot through our speeches' and more natural.

The ending was difficult to change and mock up, seeing as it was still quite weak after the feedback from our third draft. We changed it slightly, to incorporate a more over-the-top SyFy style, with Cthulhu going out with a bang, quite literally. To do this, we got inspiration from the SyFy Movie, Sharknado. Towards the end, the main character gets eaten by a Shark but cuts himself out with a Chainsaw. This made us think to ourselves, if Cthulhu can't be hurt from the outside, what about the inside? This resulted in Legrasse, saving his partner from being eaten by the beast, and has him jump into its mouth himself, yet holding a fuel cannister. Just before Cthulhu is sent back, Legrasse manages to blast his way out of Cthulhu's torso, and is the first time we properly see Cthulhu in actual physical pain.

Regarding Cthulhu and Legrasse, we needed to incorporate a scene with an actual confrontation between the two, rather than just at the end. This resulted in Legrasse climbing to a roof top and confronting the beast head on, resulting in a, rather action packed, cat and mouse chase between Legrasse and Cthulhu, with Legrasse representing the mouse, and Cthulhu chasing after him. Despite his size, Cthulhu does have factors of personality, as he is a highly intelligent monster, compared to others that you get in monster movies, who tend to be large creatures acting on instinct.

We also needed Legrasse and Fiber to do more detecting, as they are detectives, but I believe we managed that quite successfully, despite sometimes it being quite subtle when they do so.

Overall, despite the cutting of many characters, the changing of others, all is necessary in a script. We encountered many problems but managed to make amends to the best of our ability, using different techniques of other people proof reading, and doing read throughs ourselves with an outside source of someone who had never read the script.

Now, all 103 pages are properly bound, and is placed in our production package.