Production Package - Script 2nd Draft

The second draft of the script is finished, and we are currently waiting on feedback before we perform the final bit of editing for the final draft, and getting the script along with everything else, sent off for publishing within a book.

The script proved a rather difficult edit this time around. The main problem was giving the characters we had created more depth, as a lot of the time they were very flat, and their lines felt like they could have been said by anyone.

Now, after finishing the character profiles, and sending them to my co-writer James, we managed to capture the essence of each character. Legrasse, a hardened cop who knows what he wants and how to get results, now reflects this a lot of the time in his lines. Fiber, his partner, has a lot of "sass" and is very sarcastic throughout. Professor William Webb is partly obsessed with his past, constantly attempting to tell old stories of when he was an explorer, and these are just to name a few. With the added character depth, we managed to rework most of the lines into incorporating more personality into them.

Capitalizing was another thing we had to do, though it did not prove all that difficult, going through every name within the script, as well as big actions, expressions and props of interest, which we put into capitals to made them stand out. (We were also missing a fair bit of punctuation ie. full stops at the end of paragraphs or speech, but we have included that within now).

Possibly the most difficult bit of editing we had to do altogether was reworking and reorganizing the script. In our initial feedback we were told that Legrasse's wife and son should be taken earlier, around the 20-30 page mark, whereas previously it wasn't until around the 50th page where the two characters actually went missing. We moved the scene, thus causing a panic and a worry within Legrasse from early on. He eventually reaches his point of no return towards the end of the script, after thinking he see's his wife, causing him to almost break down entirely. We felt this would give a bigger sense of urgency behind the script, as well as giving Legrasse more depth and the overall story a more interesting flavour.

This did cause some disturbance in the rest of the script, as we had to try and make it flow still, despite the reordering of many of the scenes. We managed to do this however, by adding a few scenes here and there (such as an introduction for Legrasse and Fiber, actually stating that they were cops/detectives) and overall the piece came together rather well.

As we wait for feedback we continue with the other work we have, and are organizing everything we need for the book which we are going to send off to get printed this weekend, ready for it to arrive by the hand in time.