So after the Group Crit session we had last Tuesday, I have taken my story into consideration and I have made some considerable changes to it, whilst also keeping the premise relatively the same.
I am still going for an internal fight within the female crack addict character, but removing the physical violent act of the drug dealer at the end, and focusing a lot more on the struggle with the girl. It has also given the piece a lot more depth and makes it seem like I'm telling a story rather than having a random act of violence committed at the end.
To start off, the girl walks in the park, in order to clear her head, and get away from everything as she attempts to battle her addiction. Once again, she will still be dressed the same, messy hair, no make up, bags under her eyes, with large over-sized dirty clothes. As she is walking along she picks up a wooden stick and starts mindlessly playing with it. A short ways down the path, she gets the stick caught up in the tire of the bicycle of a passing cyclist. The man on the bike falls off the bike, knocking the bike and the girl down. As they tumble, a small bag of drugs (crack) falls out of the mans hoodie's pocket. As they get up the man checks his pocket in a fluster, as if he is looking for something. As the girl stands, she picks up the bag showing it to him. He quickly takes it off her as she asks "is that...?". The man reluctantly nods, and looks at the girl, and asks her if she wants to buy some. Tempted, but trying to resist, the girl reaches for it, but shakes her head and runs over to a nearby bench. The man smiles to himself, as if he has come up with a scheme to make some money off this girl. He cycles over to her and the bench, and sits down next to her. He slides the bag of drugs to the middle of the bench, saying "If you want it... take it" implying to leave money as well, but he stands up, and cycles slightly further away, so he can not see what she does. As she looks at the bag, she does not know what to do, scared and confused, she doesn't know whether to take it or not, and is really struggling with the choice. After a short amount of time, she tells herself "one last time" and grabs it and takes some immediately. The man returns to find her on the floor, clearly having had an Over dose. He panics, see's the bag is open, and tries to find a phone on the girl. Finding one, he dials 999 before pocketing the bag and cycling off in a panic, leaving her on the floor.
It DOES seem like a lot, and like I might not be able to fit it into 3 minutes, BUT i have just got into vast amounts of detail there. In reality, not that much happens visuallywise and it can be done, I have it all planned out. I have very nearly completed my shot list and my script, ready for my shoot on Thursday, of which I am certain will run very smoothly as I know exactly what I want, know what locations I shall be using.
My crew has already been assembled as well
Myself - Director
David Anga - Camera
James Ogden - Lighting
And my cast:
Girl - Tory Stewart-Wooler
Man/Dealer - Jamie Shaw
I am very excited to shoot it, and to edit it, and if all goes to plan, the finished production should look very good!
Ciao for now!
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