Final Major Production - Drafts 3 and 4 of Script

So after receiving feedback for my second draft of the script I have taken the time and since done 2 more drafts of the script.

In my third draft, I took on board the feedback. I was having the problem that many things (including the speech especially) did not fit the overall tone of my piece. The problem being I had scenes that were too melodramatic and over the top, when this is meant to be a serious piece. In order to rectify this, I cut out a lot, almost 11 pages in total. This brought my script down to around 30 pages. I edited some of the speech in scenes that were too melodramatic and brought it to a point where I feel it flows a lot better.

In terms of draft 4, I have now decided rather than doing a 2 part pilot, which would be two individual scripts, I am going to just do one script, along with 5 treatments. I had written the second script already, however it did not reach how long I wanted it to be - it was only 29 pages, so I needed more content. To get over this, I combined the scripts together, coming in at a total of 62 pages. This gives the entire piece a lot more to them, in terms of what happens and how everything comes together, and with around 89/90 scenes, I believe this makes it feel more like a proper pilot episode, where a lot goes on and a lot happens.

It may come to the point with draft 5 where I have to cut out even more, around 15 pages, to bring it back down to 45 pages, however I await feedback. It is possible that the pilot episode be an extended length rather than 2 parts, thus keeping it at the length now.

I am happy with how it has gone so far, and have been looking into Melodrama to see if I do want my piece to continue this way, if it turns out I am still writing quite melodramatically. Blog to follow about melodrama.